Chapter 122 (22) Rhetorical flaws

(Wang Guowei) In the poems before Bingwu, there is a "Title Portrait of a Friend" that says: "Chai Xi has the same habit all his life, and Xiao deeply loves to recite Jiannan poems." Today, the writing is easy and smooth, and it is a solid body of Fang Weng; the topic is broad. , It is also close to Fang Weng.If "The sound of the water is as rough as a proud general, and the sky is as desolate as a sick man" in "Sit in the Rain on the Fifteenth Night of May", it is especially similar to what Zhu Zhulong criticized in "Shu Jian Nan Ji Hou".There are flaws in rhetoric, such as "Xiaobu", which has been recited in the world, and "after the new rain in the ten thousand trees, Baichang wakes up before the dawn wind, the four seasons are lovely but the spring day, if one thing can be crazy, it will be a boy", the middle four Sentences all start with numbers, which is unavoidable to be regarded as a doctor's edict ③.Another example is the neck couplet of "Miscellaneous Feelings" quoted earlier: "Chihuai Fu Shuitiao Mountain, entrusting the meaning of Kaiyuan Wudejian", that is, imitating Fang Weng's "Traveling and Returning to Anshangkou Zhan": "Sending Huai Chushui to Wushan Li, proud of Tang poetry and Jin calligraphy Between" sentence tone.Don't say "above Emperor Xi"

Or "Huang, Nong, Yu, Xia", and "Kaiyuan Wude", it should be concluded with Shaoling's "You Tan": "Wu De Kaiyuan, how can common people climb again." "Fushuitiao Mountain" four The word, Yixin Festival, is taken from Fang Weng's "Dongli" poem: "Every time because of dreaming and swimming in the water, I consciously hide my predecessor in Huashan".However, "Fushui Huashan" is an idiom. Tang Yuye's "Title of Huashan Majushi's Dwelling" said: "When the ice is broken, listen to the water, and when the snow is clear, look at Huashan." In the classic "Luqi" ④, there are three times in Yenei, and it is also different from Duan Kegu's "No Return Messenger" ⑤.

(Pages 25-26) ①Zhu Zhulong: The respected title of Zhu Yi, a litterateur in the Qing Dynasty.Volume 52 of his "Expo Shuting Collection" "Shu Jian Nan Ji Hou": "A poet's analogy is one of the six righteousnesses, which can be done by chance. Lu Wuguan's "Jiannan Collection" has dense syntax, and reading the final volume is disgusting. If the body is like an old monk but has hair, the door is as strong as a cottage Famous officials'; 'Traces are like spring duckweeds that never arrive, and hearts are like autumn swallows restless in their nests'; 'Body is like a mad Taoist priest at home, and heart is like a Zen master who has been discharged from the hospital'..."

②Defect tired: defect, negligence. ③ Doctor of Suan: In the early Tang Dynasty, Luo Bin and Wang Wenhao used numbers, and his name at that time was Doctor of Suan. ④ Luqi: People in the Song Dynasty talked about actors and personnel, and whenever they involved ambiguity, they called actors Luqi. ⑤ Duan Kegu: Duan Chengshi, a writer in the Tang Dynasty. Wang Guowei is deep in lyrics and music, and does not use the title of the poem. He occasionally writes, and there are also witty lines, such as "Mocking the Cuckoo": "My family is used to being a guest from a foreign country, and I still persuade them to return from the court." I don’t know how many people will be urged to return.” ("Jing'an Poetry Draft") Another example is "Thirty Portraits of Friends": "Chai Xi has the same addiction all his life, and Xiao deeply loves reciting Jiannan poems." They are all clear as words, natural and fluent , also said the hobby of reciting Lu You's poems.This one points out that Wang Guowei's poem "has the whole body of Fangweng, and the subject is broad, and it is close to Fangweng." For example, the neck couplet of "Miscellaneous Gan" cited here is an imitation of Lu You's sentence tone, which is very obvious in comparison.But the rhetoric is not particular, and sometimes there is suspicion of splitting idioms. As Mr. Qian pointed out, "Fushuitiaoshan" is a hybrid of the idiom "Fushuihuashan".

This is to point out the shortcomings of Wang Guowei's poems, such as the sentence "the sound of the water is rough like a proud general, and the sky is desolate like a sick man", using two direct metaphors of "such as" and "like". Lu You also likes to use such metaphors in his poems. Criticized by Zhu Yizun, he thought that "the syntax is so dense that it is disgusting to read the final volume". Mr. Qian also pointed out that the rhetoric of Wang Guowei's poems is "flawed from time to time", such as the Qilu "Xiaobu": "Xinglai walks on the southern qian at will, with the willows hanging on the road. After the new rain in Wanmu, Baichang wakes up to dawn. Before the wind. The four seasons are lovely, but the spring day is the only thing that can be crazy. I will make an appointment with the wild gull, and I will never say goodbye to the cold smoke." Every sentence of the jaw couplet and neck couplet is led by a number, "Wanmu", "Hundreds of trees" Chang", "Four Seasons" and "One Thing".Wang Guowei likes to make antithetical sentences, but rhetoric like this can be seen from time to time, such as the two sentences in "Du Shi": "Three parties merged into emperors, which has never existed in ancient times, and I have heard of two virtuous ones." (The following quotes refer to Qian Zhonglian's "Chronicle of Qing Poetry"); two lines in "Shu Road Difficulty": "Ten years of holding festivals all over the southwest, thousands of miles of Huanghuaguang road"; Nine temples are lucky to be safe"; there are also "a hundred years of chasing after one's arms, one night is hard to blame others", etc. Using too many numbers is also a disadvantage.